Can you read and help me on my story? [best answer]?

First of all, I love your story. Send me your finished work when your'e done. It's great! Secondly, here's my opinion: Instead of at the beginning where you said, billie know, change it to billie knows. Then, Instead of "Billie you have got another stain on your shirt, say "Billie you have another stain on your shirt" Or, You have gotten another stain..Then, Don't continue the sentence about Mama being upset, I think it's too long, a run-on sentence. Put a period at the end of for awhile. Then, say it happened a countless number of times before, so Billie knew that mama would get over it soon. Instead of saying, saying The floral bordered window had a view to nothing, change it to, the floral bordered window had a view of nothing. Then, where you wrote, Billie was there to see the dandelions grow each year, and then by summer, see them float away. Change it to Billie was there to see the dandelions grow each year, and then by the summer, see them float away. Also, you wrote billie wrong once. you wrote billy instead. Other than a few grammar corrections, it was wonderful! Your really good!